Wednesday, March 25, 2009

Chapter Fifteen: Her Only Sin

Hayden stood with his head down.
Hayden
I was careless.
 
Amros
You were. However, you did not know what this Cameron child was capable of.
 
Hayden
All the more reason not to have acted on sheer ignorance.
 
Amros
You can’t blame yourself entirely, friend. Arkain and Suri’s death cannot be held on your shoulders forever.
 
Hayden
I just can’t bear it, Amros. The hope for this world and my daughter, killed.
 
Amros
Loss has to be seen as normal, Hayden. You should know this by now.
 
Hayden
The boy, Cameron, he is mine. I will own his skull in the near future.
 

Amros
As you wish.
 
Merdos ran through the wall in panic.
Merdos
My lords, Gemma has escaped.


The burnt down church was completely surrounded by cops and a few firemen. The scene was being scoped for evidence and bodies. 
Officer 1
This is so weird, only body we found was of a priest.
Officer 2
Why is that weird?
Officer 1
He had a bullet lodged in his head.
Officer 2
Interesting. Maybe he had it coming?
Officer 1
What he do? Commit a sin so horrible a bullet fell from the sky and landed in his head?
Officer 2
I don’t know, just a thought.
Officer 1
Couldn’t have been a robbery. I mean come on, who the hell robs a church?
Officer 2
Maybe it wasn’t robbed. Maybe some guy came in and just blew the place up.
They laughed.
Officer 2
You think it’s wrong that we’re laughing right now?
Officer 1
Honestly, after seeing what happened to this church, I don’t think I know what’s wrong anymore.
Officer 2
What’s that?
 
In the middle of where the church was stood Gemma, her red coat glimmering in the sun. 
Officer 1
Girl, come here.
 
Gemma did not move.
Gemma
Arkain!
 

Officer 2
She looks like one of those kids from that high school who’s missing.
Officer 1
She could be.
 
The officers walked forward. 
Gemma
Arkain! 

Officer 1
Excuse me, kid?

Gemma
You made me a promise. You can’t break it.
 

Officer 2
Hey!

Tears were falling down Gemma’s face. 
Gemma
You can’t be dead, you can’t.
 
She fell to her knees.
Officer 1
I think she’s the blind one.
Officer 2
Gemmy? Was that her name?
Officer 1
Something like that. Alright, let’s haul her in.
 

Gemma
Arkain, I’m still here, I’m still alive. Where are you?
 
The officers grabbed her.
Gemma
Leave me alone! Leave me alone! Arkain!
 
They took her and put her into the back seat of the car. 
Gemma
ARKAIN!
 
She sat in the car. 
Gemma
I’m alone, again.

She cried like she did when she was young.

18 years ago…..
Doctor
Mrs. Lee, it’s a girl
.
She held the baby girl in her hands with her husband next to her. 
Nurse
Can I have the name you’d like for her?
 
Mrs. Lee began to cry.
Mrs. Lee 
Gemma, Gemma Rose Lee.

16 years ago…. 
Mrs. Lee
She doesn’t cry, it’s amazing. I have not lost any sleep at all.
Friend
I wish my kid wouldn’t, he never shuts up.
Mrs. Lee
Did I ever tell you what her first word was?
Friend
No, what?
Mrs. Lee
Cry!
Friend
Really, why?
Mrs. Lee
We were watching a movie called Her Only Sin and I was crying because the little girls parents died in it, and she turned an looked up at me and said it.
Friend
That’s crazy. My son’s first word was bastard. Not my fault his father's a lowlife bastard.


13 years ago.....
Gemma sat down with her mother waiting for the eye doctor.
Gemma
Mommy, I'm scared.
Mrs. Lee
It's okay baby, no matter what, it will be fine.
Gemma
I know mommy. I just always want to be able to see you.
Mrs. Lee
Right now, take a picture of my face with your eyes, and engrave it in your heart. You'll always see me, you'll never be alone.
She kissed Gemma on the forehead.
Gemma
Smile, mommy.
Mrs. Lee smiled. The Eye doctor came out seconds later giving the news that Gemma was going blind.

12 years ago.... 
Room full of people shouted happy birthday! 
Mrs. Lee
Now make a wish!
Six year old Gemma thinks and blows out candles. 
Mrs. Lee
What did you wish for baby?
 
Gemma
If I told you, it wouldn’t come true, mommy.
 

Mrs. Lee
I hope it comes true.
 
She kissed Gemma on the forehead.

6 years ago…
Police officers knocked on the Lee household and the babysitter opened the door and called Gemma down. 
Officer
Gemma, your parents got into a car accident.
 
Gemma
No! They went to go eat. They’ll be back later.
 
Officer
Gemma, I need to take you to your grandma’s.
 

Gemma
Leave me alone! Leave me alone! Mommy, daddy!
 
He put her into the car.
Gemma
Mommy!

Her only wish she ever made while blowing out her birthday candles was to never be alone. 
Gemma
He said they’d die, he said I’d only have him in the end.
 
Officer
What you say back there? What did he say?
 

Gemma
Nothing.
 
With the loss of all she knew, 
Gemma
You will be my only sin, my only real sin.
 
she gave birth to a monster.

43 comments:

  1. Wow, im seriously left speechless. I'm happy you added more. That made me cry D: This was just incridble seriously. I love hearing about the characters past :D Keep going!

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  2. I love reading about the characters past. Gemmas makes me sad, but now I understand where her monster came from, its tradgic. I really like this story, i hope you post another chapter soon. also I really hope Arkain and Suri are not dead.

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  3. I never commented on this chapter =O

    I hope that Arkain and Suri are somewhere hiding and they aren't truly dead...

    I do like that Gemma has a background story attached to her; it reminds me of background stories from Watchmen, which is good. Because if you didn't write this chapter I would've passed her by as a simple, secondary character.

    And could she have been predicting what happened to her mother? I mean, with that first word and the movie as a reference to the accident... Anyways, great chapter :)

    P.S.
    I like the fact that you added the eye doctor part. At first I had thought she was born that way, but then I remembered that she could just remember her mother's and someone else's face.

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  4. i commented on this before but it's always good to read again. i like where this is going, i liked hearing about gemma's past but it's just always so sad...you can really see all of gemma's past the way you wrote it. awesome stuff.

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  5. This made me sad. Gemma's reaction was like mine... haha, Arkain CAN'T be dead. I won't have it. :) Great chapter. I like Gemma now. Haha. But Arkain HASSS to come back.

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  6. another favorite.i like reading about Gemma even thought it's pretty sad.ah,and Arkain and Suri are dead.it still made me gasp even though i read this chapter before.

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  7. "Oh man intense, utterly intense. The background story to Gemma is crazy. Never thought that there was so much to her life and all. To think that Gemma is this individual that has so much in the past, one has to think about what will happen in the future, what will she do? If Arkain and Suri are dead, now what? Or are Arkain and Suri really dead? Many questions are still coming up from just reading this chapter and all. Hope that the next one is as intense or more. Good job dudes."- Chris Galvan

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  8. "this is indeed intense.......haha i now question quite a few things with gemma's story of being alone. that's so sad."- Logan

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  9. "Thats why Gemma nvr wanted to b left alone....this chapter is pretty sad dude....i wonder wonder what is going to happen....in the next chapter???"- Brittany

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  10. "Gemmy hahahahahaha i had me a good laugh with that one....anyways i really liked gemma's story!....youre a great writer, keep them coming! :]"-Tnaid

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  11. "omfg. omfg. omfg.......this is the most intense chapter so far. hands down.......i never would have guessed gemma had a good family that guided her before all of this.......Now, she has this monster inside of her, now finally born. OH SNAP!......Kudos steven, kudos.......and I'm itching to know. are arkain and suri truly dead?......"- Clara

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  12. "wait,what?Arkain is dead?whoa.didn't see that one coming.amazing chapter buddy!........(Gemma Rose Lee...Gypsy Rose Lee...hahaha.Distillers,nice!)"- Maria

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  13. "Hm. Gemma never cried. Anything to do with her being blind? I can't wait to read it in hardcover =]"-Marissa

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  14. oh my gosh dude this is intense!!! i love how you describe Gemma's childhood, and it is soo sad to see that she had the perect childoohood, until the death of her parents..but maybe her wish isnt broken, maybe he is still out there??..

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  15. First of all Gemma Rose Lee-sounds an awful lot like GYPSY Rose Lee, the exotic dancer. Interesting.
    So another sad chapter. Does anyone in this story NOT have a devestating past? Now I feel bad for my earlier comment about Gemma on meds. "/

    I'm really interested in this deep connection she feels to Arkain! What's binding them together, besides the fact that she killed his mother? There's definitely more complexity to their relationship and I'm trying to figure out what it it is!

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  16. i feel so bad for Gemma right now! i liked reading about her past and getting to know more about her. and i hope she doesnt end up alone

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  17. more past stories about the characters.
    poor gemma. ;(
    i wonder how tortorous it is to have something like krysin inside of her.
    & now arkain's gone too.
    or is he.. really?

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  18. Did I ever tell you the flasbacks are my favorite chapters. I really like how you associate the characters power/ personality with there past. And the lines she said before she got in the car in both the present and the past making them the same was genious.

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  19. I just had this intense sinking feeling in my stomach. Wow. I want to hug Gemma... well as long as she wont kill me ;)

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  20. Ohmy! i'm in shock.
    What happened to Suri and Arkain? dun dun dunnnn

    Andd Gemma created Krysin to cope? Is that what he is?

    I feel so bad for Gemma, someone said something about hugging her, Iwant to too.

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  21. gemma's gonna be fine.

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  22. Wow, Gemma never ceases to amaze and intrigue me. She is such a beautiful person, and you can see that through how much she loved her mother and how attached she is to Arkain. I know she may have this dark side, but I really feel like she cant help it and thats what makes it all so sad. Once again, I LOVE the flashback chapters. and this one especially because I really like Gemma's character and want to know more about her life and past.

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  23. Gahsvshsjaagashdbdjdixisnsn
    This is my favorite chapter so far, I like how it is set up "16 years ago", "14 years ago".
    I also like how twister gemma is and how she created him!

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  24. i think gemma really deserved her own history being told. it tells how she received her demon.



    but i already knew arkain and suri wouldnt have been killed so easily. :)

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  25. i like how the characters in this story has something tragic happened to them, so many fantasy stories try to make everything all rainbows and sun shine . this is is refreshing

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  26. I like how you put funny lines in ..

    But omg poor Gemma shes had a rough life and just doesnt wanna be alone its so sad...going thru all shes been thru already in life shes stronger and she doesnt even know it..

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  27. "That’s crazy. My son’s first word was bastard. Not my fault his fathers a lowlife bastard."
    HAHAHAHAHHAAHAHHAH!!!! I THOUGHT THAT PART WAS FUCKEN HILARIOUS! AHAHAHAHAHAH
    wow:')
    but anyways, i love how gemma's demon or whatever is introduced here! finally, a taste of her past

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  28. wow! good perspective into Gemma's world!

    Arkain cant really be dead????? and suri???? omg

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  29. I enjoyed the back story on gemma...showing all these different moments I hold to be significant

    But her worse fear...to be alone has happened for the 2nd time and is unbearable

    The one person she wronged so horribly but is the only soul she can see clearly has been ripped from her and I feel her heartache and loss of sanity..she just gives in

    How tragic

    And hayden's pain...if only they had been honest

    Things cud have been different

    everything could have been different

    they should have prepared arkain not let things go this far

    Good solid chapter :)

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  30. I like finding out about the characters' pasts.

    Also, ARKAIN CAN'T BE DEAD.

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  31. "She gave birth to a monster." Great line. Very cool with the series of flash backs. Really want to know what happened to Arkain and Suri and what is going to happen to Gemma.

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  32. Gemma's backstory is epic, I can't wait for more on her.

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  33. Speechless. Awesome! Gemma's past was sad. Wonder how shes not a human.

    Great chapter

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  34. Gemma's past was a sad one.. But explains why she is the way she is.. Everything is filling up to be an amazing story. Great work Steven.

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  35. Arkain and Suri aren't dead. Arkain's wings protected him. Mayb. :p I like this flashback of Gemma's. It seems that most of your characters dont have parents, and that they are alone except that they have each other and fight for humanity!

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  36. It also explains why Gemma wants Arkain in her life. She doesnt like being alone.

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  38. No way Arkain and Suri are dead! The story is called Arkain!! lol
    Gemma escaped! Oh what does this mean? what's going to happen!?
    Those officers are scandalous yo!
    Gemma at the church site! "oh shit" was my first thought...
    "Right now take a picture of my face with your eyes and engrave into your heart. You'll always see me, you'll never be alone." awwwwwwwwwwwwww I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS!!!! SO BEAUTIFUL..........

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  39. Gemma and her story are something that are unique and sort of strange, in a way. She has battled through a lot for such a young age and now has lost the other person that said they would never leave. It seems like that did not come true, unless we have a surprise coming and have not yet made the connection, then again, what is that connection?! Is her only sin Krysin?

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  40. These backstories, man... Killing me. (in the best way)

    I really do enjoy how you write about the characters' pasts and tie them into the present. It shows the reader WHY they are the way they are, and shows that you've actually given a lot of thought and depth to each character. Definitely applaud you on that :)

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